托福写作中一些错误屡见不鲜，一些考生只顾及到怎样用经典句加分，却忘了打好基础，在用句不能保证正确的情况下，返璞归真来的更实际，就算少了一些华丽的辞藻，也不至于因为作文中多处诟病而被扣分，托福写作中谨记打好基础是大前提，之后再考虑修饰问题。
1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level。
改进：Artists' work upgrades our civilization。
2. For example， you work in a big factory。
改进： Suppose you work in a big factory。
3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job。
改进：You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career。
4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck。
改进： We will get nowhere if we rely on luck。
5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level。
改进： He will get a higher salary， thus improving his life。
6. Their brain is still very young。
改进： They are still immature。
7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things。
改进： Dissatisfaction impels people for the better。
8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong。
改进： They cannot tell right from wrong。
9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time。
改进： It will help children learn to make good use of time。
10. Though it is not the best job， it afford to his life。
改进： Though it is not the best job， a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it。 |
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